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Reviews for A Confession Of Love

By : sesshoumaru
  • From ANON - Uber Uke Kurama on October 07, 2006
    Ok, I've never read a KuwaKura before... But I read yours out of curiosity... AND I LOVED IT!! I'm still a die-hard HieiKura fan, but this was definitly worth reading! n_n But, I pretty much like anything with an uke Kurama... O_o Despite some grammer stuff this was well... at the risk of being redundant... great! n_n;; I look forward to reading more from you. (Yes, yes, I realize how totally late this review is...)


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  • From ANON - asif on September 24, 2005
    hi i kinda like it
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  • From FullMetalBlunt on May 14, 2005
    Great, I love seeing Kuwa-chan and Kurama hook up. I don't care what anyone says, it's a nice pair up. Good work. The ass slap was worth millions. ;)
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  • From ANON - anubis_soundwave on January 10, 2005
    My only real issue with this story is formatting. I'm aware of the recreational nature of fanfics, so I won't tell you about misspelled words or poor word choice. ["sheesh--it's just a story starring cartoon characters!"] No; my main issue:

    BLOCK TEXT. Since Kuwabara happens to be a favorite of mine, (and he has few fanfics as is) I made the effort to read it. But make no mistake, it’s difficult to read; I usually don’t bother once I see a lot of block text.

    Ex. A

    Kurama gave him a caring look and lead him over to the couch. They sown own and Kurama placed his hand on his leg. Kurama laughed and smiled at him. “Don’t be embarrassed. You’re not the only one who has these feelings.”
    Kuwabara looked up at him not quite understanding what he was saying to him. Kurama bought his hand to the larger man’s face and smiled at him. Kuwabara decided to make him move, he leaned over and placed his lips on Kurama’s. Kurama parted his lips slightly and Kuwabara slipped his tongue into the smaller man’s[...hard on readers’ eyes]

    Another way[easier on eyes; more natural reading flow]:

    Ex. B

    Kurama gave him a caring look and lead him over to the couch. They sown own and Kurama placed his hand on his leg.

    Kurama laughed and smiled at him. “Don’t be embarrassed. You’re not the only one who has these feelings.”

    Kuwabara looked up at him not quite understanding what he was saying to him. Kurama bought his hand to the larger man’s face and smiled at him.

    Kuwabara decided to make him move, he leaned over and placed his lips on Kurama’s. Kurama parted his lips slightly and Kuwabara slipped his tongue into the smaller man’s mouth and pulled him on top of him. Kurama straddled him and tangled his fingers in Kuwabara’s hair.

    Kuwabara slide his hands under his lover shirt and ran his fingers along his spine. Kuwabara broke the kiss and let his mouth explore the counters of his jaw and neck. Kuwabara brought his hands to the button of Kurama’s shirt and began to undo them. Kurama helped him take the shirt off; letting it fall to the floor.

    Kuwabara took Kurama and laid him down on the couch and straddled him. Kuwabara kissed Kurama’s lips, neck, shoulder, and stopped when his mouth came to Kurama’s nipples. He gently kissed each nipple and took them into his mouth. Slowly licking and sucking them. He let the nipples fall from his lips. He gently blew on them watching them getting harder begging for more attention. Kurama let out a low moan.

    He was edger to feel Kuwabara’s skin against his own. Kurama started pulling at his shirt hoping he would take it off. Kuwabara sat up and removed his shirt and threw it on the floor.

    He brought his lips back to Kurama’s and slipped his tongue inside his awaiting mouth. As they kissed they moved their hips in unison; grinding their manhood together. Both of their nipples were erect erotically massaging each other.

    Kurama’s hands slowly discovered the newly exposed skin of his lover. As he let out anothow mow moan. Kurama broke the kiss and looked into Kuwabara’s eyes.

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    The above simply displays another way to format paragraphs, which I think would make your writing a bit more readable. If it’s more readable, you have more people reading your fics. The only advantage I can see to block text is that it makes chapters shorter.

    Other than said formatting issue, your story’s okay. I’ve _written_ worse. Though I’d think Kurama would be a bit more dominant than Kuwabara. I love the latter to death, but I know Kurama’s “stronger”(as in, more skilled at fighting) than Kuwabara.

    [someday, I’ll have to post my Citrus Excursion fics. then you can make fun of my writing. :-D]

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    My 2.09232 yen. (courtesy of XE.com) I thank you for your time.

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  • From ANON - Anon on January 01, 2005
    good
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  • From ANON - Kouga\'s girl on December 01, 2004
    um it's was a little disturbing to tell you i'm more of a Hiei Kurama or Jin, Kurama you know never um tought to much on Kurwbara i mosty bash him in my t or d fic well my char did have a crush on him when she was 8 but ya was nicey wrote thou
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  • From YaoiGoddess on October 16, 2004
    Kamisama! This was great! I love Kuwa-chan so much! ^^ I'm with you, and I feel sorry for those who can't see past Kuwa-chan's looks. Personally I think he's very glompable. ^_^ Anyway, I just wanted to tell you that you did a great job with this, and that I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for writing this!

    LemonKitty
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  • From ANON - A Friend on September 13, 2004
    I like your ideasand the flow of the story. The only thing you might want to work on is your grammer other than that I really injoyed your story.
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  • From ANON - Sam Fook on February 01, 2004
    This was really nice. I'm one of thoss KuwaKura supporters because they compliment eachother. Written nicley, and really great.
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  • From ANON - LadyMoon on January 16, 2004
    Personly I love Kurama/Kuwabara pairing as well as other unique pairings. *evil grin* I also love your writing stile and plote. I hope you will contule wirting and maybe with any luck you will write anther Kurama/Kuwabara story. *hint, hint* ^_~
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  • From ANON - dana-sama fool on January 10, 2004
    One bad word to tell you ~ disturbing ~ two good words ~ long story ~ That is all, so let me get back, getting kuwa/kurama nightmares
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  • From ANON - bitBlackmage on December 31, 2003
    That was nice... I liked how sweet it was. Then the lemon and
    then back to the sweetness! This was great.
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  • From ANON - gasps on December 08, 2003
    Um... Yeah, did I mention my little
    flaw? The thing where I go crazy for
    read heads and carrops?ops? Hehehe!
    GO YOU!! AND GO KURAMA!!
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  • From ANON - Jasmine Soyokaze on November 28, 2003
    Oh god I love your stories!!! I didnt know you had another one. Ummm all I can say is that this kicks superior ass. KURAMA AND KUWABARA FOREVER!!! n_n
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  • From ANON - Can U Guesse Who? on November 04, 2003
    Very innteresting. But can u take an even tougher challenge? I dare....no triple dare u to type a Hiei and Kuwabara fic?!!! Ha! I'm so evil! I don't even aprove of thoses very evil fics, but I will make an exception! U don't gotta do it if u don't want to. I'm just seeing how twisted u can get! Mwhahahahahahaha! If u do end up acept my challenge! E-MAIL ME!
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