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From ANON - Kaorustalker30 (Formerly, Lurker) on April 03, 2005
Chapter 9:

That. Just. Hurt. Ugh, angst kills me sometime's. Now *that's* something Kurama *would* cry over. Trust it to Kurama to end up in bed with someone. -.- Yoko was probably howling in agony when Yusuke said, �Don�t you ever�.*ever* fucking touch me again Kurama! You lost that right when you stuck your cock in Hiei.� God, you did the angst so well, you had me teary-eyed. (Which in and of itself is rare considering how fucking difficult I am with any emotion that's not Horniness, Amusement, or Weariness (*Is* horniness an emotion?). With Yusuke not fighting Hiei, I don't think it was out of character at all really - Yusuke is still feeling new to the relationship and it's too much of a shock that Kurama's cheating on him. Not to mention, he just 'broke up' with Keiko and shunned his heterosexual side (officially) for Kurama - all he could feel was hurt and absolute betrayal. Even though most think of Yusuke as a, "When in doubt, bust some ass." type of guy, like I've said before - Yusuke is a thoughtful person. Big on emotion's and all that but bottle's it all up inside of him. Whenever it can't be bottled up anymore, that proverbial bottle shatter's and the backlash is sometime's good for Yusuke (Like in the Dark Tournament when Kuwabara dies), or bad. He's going to fuck Evan - are you INSANE?! Fucking Excellent Chapter.

Chapter 10: (My. Fucking. Fingers. Hurt.)(I'm getting no sleep today because of you)

I'll do these in fragments, because I have homework to procrastinate from - er do. *ahem*:
~Aw, you should have made it Keiko. I like her more than Evan-The-Bastard-That-Kurama-Should-Spike-For-Not-Being-Dead-In-The-First-Place. -.-
~*Uses her best commercial voice* Hyfel-The Date Rape drug for Demons! Coming to a store near you. Buy now while supplies last!

KARASU?! lmfao Can I just say that I liked Karasu (I mean, the dude was so demon, I'm pretty sure Yoko wouldn't have really wanted him dead if he didn't remind him so much of Kuronue lol) What can I say, guy's who want you dead to "Preserve your beauty" turn me on. Rawr! Yoko and Karasu would have had some good sex, if only Karasu wasn't afraid of Yoko (I secretly believe Karasu was afraid to bottom). Instead Karasu decided to pray on SHUUICHI OF ALL PEOPLE. Fact: Don't fuck with Shuuichi if you don't want Yoko to rip you apart with his bare hand's. Which then bring's me to another part: Er. Fight. Scene. With. Karasu. Where? *Blink* lol I can tell you didn't want to do the fight, afterall - you just took off Karasu's head, that's it. Last time Kurama got his ASS KICKED, this time Karasu didn't even get to kick anyone's ass. How cruel could you be? *wail* I was looking for a !YOKO! appearance, this time without the Polyjuice potion - WOAH! WRONG FANDOM *stare's at that* I probably shouldn't be reading HP while doing YYH at 4 A.M.*blink* *Gets back on track* yeah.. er... OH! WHAT HAPPENED TO YOKO! There was such potential to really turn that reunion into something huge! I mean, damn - Karasu should have went back to the Makai so that he'd have to lure Kurama in his territory, and then they could have been battling through the forest's of the Makai (sadly, there would be no appearance of Yomi - I LOVE YOMI - b/c this is after the Dark Tournament). Then Yoko could have made an appearance once Shuuichi's wound's started to weigh him down, AND JUST RIPPED KARASU APART WITH A DEATH TREE... OR TWO. lol I really wanted a fight scene damnit -.-

~Hiei. Not. Being. An. Asshole? *eye's get adorably wide* I love Hiei now. *cuddle's chibi Hiei* Now THAT was Hiei*ish?* He wouldn't be so direct, as Kurama had mentioned to Yusuke very early in the series, Hiei has his own code of language. But, yes, he'd support Kurama undoubtedly. He'd probably say something along the line's of, "Stop being so damn pathetic, fox. I never knew you were so weak, over that idiot no less - where are those brain's you pride yourself on?" Kurama would glare at Hiei and then Hiei'd continue, "The carrot-topped idiot begged me to tell you about his stupid party. Go, and stop feeling sorry for yourself - feh, it's even making *me* sick." Which in Hiei language means, "I think you should go to this gathering. It would be good for you to get your mind off of thing's". lol

~MUST YOU TORTURE KURAMA?! *wails for poor Kurama* It's alright Ko, you'll get through this. SPIKE EVAN AND EVERYTHING WILL BE FINE!
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From ANON - Kaorustalker30 (Formerly, Lurker) on April 03, 2005
Chapter 7:

YES FINALLY! KURAMA BEING POUNDED. THIS HOUR BEIST JOYOUS! *prances like the elf slut she is* With that sex scene, you almost hit slutty right on the head! *immensely proud of you*. You just need to master the art of dirty talk lol The hair pulling is a definite plus, as well as Yusuke talking during sex (damnit, I wanted to know WHAT he was saying. IN DETAIL. Some, "Tell me how much you like it Kurama. Tell me how much you need my cock in you" would have been. Just. Sublime. *drool* Yes. With those line's you would have definitely crossed the borderline of Slutty.) KURAMA CUTTING SCHOOL! Damn. You made Kurama addicted *astounded* Ad-dic-ted *whistles at Kurama ever cutting school* Which now makes me wonder, how long did they actually fuck that whole day? And how many times? Position's? Was Kurama sore afterward or did Yusuke take the most pounding's? Would have loved to see that in detail, too. lol *does the 'I'm a pervy elf' dance*

Chapter 8: (Otherwise known as, The Only Chapter That I Didn't Entirely Like - TOCTIDEL)
(Get ready for some constructive criticism, but remember - I LOVE YOU NO MATTER WHAT. *huggles* *ahem*)

You hate Keiko, and so you're torturing Kurama with Complex and Imaginary numbers. *stare* I. Hate. Math. And. Keiko. This chapter was my own personal hell. -.- Here are some thing's that demanded my attention: First, Evan should burn in the fiery pits of hell. Then Sesshomaru could use Tensaiga to revive him, then Tokijin to kill him again. Rinse and Repeat. -.- Second, naming him Shinji or Yuki or Rei or something even remotely *Japanese* would have flowed better. Evan. In. Japan? *blink* I suppose he could have just moved there or is a foreign exchange student; but, I'd feel better if I were making a 'Jaken' burn in the fiery pits of hell instead of an 'Evan'. lol Third, possessive Kurama - I likey.

Fourth, Kurama crying = heart-breaking sight. But, IMO it just doesn't fit his personality, especially in a situation like this. He'd be upset, no doubt, but upset enough to *cry* - that's an iffy. I don't think Kurama would be so illogical as to cry over something like that, he'd analyze the situation first and then realize that all Yusuke need's is a bit of a push in the right direction. He's more of a, "Yusuke, if you don't tell Keiko about us, then *I* will. We marked eachother Yusuke, you may not be a demon (considering what I know of your timeline, this is after the Dark Tournament, but before Chapter Black - so no demon Yusuke) and; therefore, do not know what marking means, but to a kitsune - you are my mate. Mine. No one else's. And the more people who know about the full implication's of this, the less people I am likely to hurt." Kurama would have undoubtedly watched Keiko all over Yusuke for a bit, either took it to mean that they were just being friendly or got fed-up; touched her shoulder, and politely (as possible) asked her, "Excuse me Yukimura-san but, what are you doing?". He'd be more annoyed with Yusuke for not telling her, but he'd never just leave without restaking his claim. Yoko would never allow Shuuichi to deny such a big part of himself like that, and he especially wouldn't allow Shuuichi to get soft enough as to cry over something so insignificant.

Fifth, lmao you slapped a huge ass "WARNING: KEIKO WILL BE AN OVER-DRAMATIC BITCH BECAUSE I SEVERELY HATE HER (And have been watching too much Soap Opera's)" on Keiko's character. lol I know you hate her, but *dayum* that was shocking lol You even made *me* want to slap her one, and I don't exactly hate her - I just dislike her. During her whole tirade, I wanted to go, "BITCH! THE ONLY FUCKING THING YOU DID FOR HIM WAS GIVE HIM YOUR HOMEWORK SO STOP MOANING!". Everytime Yusuke tries to kiss her, she slaps him; same thing with Inuyasha and Kagome (Now, I *FUCKING HATE* Kagome.) Everytime Inuyasha does anything Kagome doesn't like, she fucking Sit's him. The bitch. *growl*

Sixth, ooooh you're evil. Drugging Kurama like that, shame on you. *Has wild fantasy of drugging Kurama and then watching Sesshomaru have his wicked way with him.* *Purr*

Again, I WUV YOU *huggles* Remember that when you're reading the criticism's.
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From ANON - Kaorustalker30 (Formerly, Lurker) on April 03, 2005
Chapter 5&6:

Is it bad to say that whenever Kurama and some dude (because it cannot POSSIBLY be another GIRL! EW!) are having sex for the first time, I always want Kurama on bottom? *pout* I dunno. I like Kurama on bottom 2/3 of the freaking time afterall. Unless it's Yoko/Sesshomaru, in which YOKO BABY! SCREW SESSHA'S BRAIN'S OUT! YES! YES!!! YES!! *gets control over her (obsessed-with-Sessha-being-bottom-because-he'd-moan-so-prettily) self* Right. Back to Sex. I alway's feel... weird, whenever I read "10 inches". I can't help it. *shakes head* I like to leave thing's to the imagination (HA), so whenever I read exact penis sizes (lmfao that sounds like a damn organization. Exact Penis Sizes. EPS at your service), I since awkwardness. Or too much sluttiness. Both really. lol Other than the penis size issue, the scene was great. Esp. since you've never written (a successful) one lmao *HUGGLES* I WUV YOU. PWOMISE. BJ scene was sexy, very detailed and not as slutty as I would have thought you'd do it. lol (I have a soft spot for slutty. And that just *LOOKS* wrong) The sex was smutty (bordering on slutty, which pleased me to no end). The flower thing, I've never even thought about that possibility. Nice creativity there (really means this), now that I've read it, it makes perfect sense though lol After such a sex scene, I'm not sure whether to weep in joy at the "I love you's" or to gag at the sappiness and shout "GET ON WITH THE FUCKING AGAIN!" lmao

Hiei. Because this needs a paragraph all together. WTF? Notice disjointed thought's? Because YOU TRAUMATIZED ME. HOW COULD YOU?! *flail's* *gets clocked by Crawford and placed in Farfello's Straighjacket(tm)* *pant's and start's typing with toes* Hiei. Fucked. Kurama? *Soap Opera feeling's here* Hiei. Fucked. Kurama. Which now makes me want a flashback because undoubtedly THEY had some slutty sex. Hot. Raunchy. Slutty Sex. Which then makes me wonder, when *their* flower trick happened - was Kurama bottoming? And if so - wait a minute. HIEI FUCKED KURAMA! *would rip hair out if she wasn't in Farfello's Straightjacket(tm)* WOE IS ME! ALAS! YOU DOTH BREAK MY HEART! SHATTERED LIKE THY REFLECTION, REFLECTING OF THIS AGONY CALLED *HIEI. FUCKING. KURAMA.* *twitch* *calm's* I feel. Like a traitor. Because I really wanna read about Hiei/Kurama now, *if* Hiei was screwing Kurama when the flower trick occured. But I love Yusuke/Kurama. Damnit. If you leave out the fact that the last paragraph was fucking TORTURE TO MY PSYCHE!! *wriggles so you can hear the buckle's of Farfello's Straighjacket(tm)* These two chapters were great, the sex was awesome.

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From ANON - Kaorustalker30 (Formerly, Lurker) on April 03, 2005
Chapter 3:

Only thing I have to say is: WTF?! YOU MADE HIEI INTO AN OBSESSIVE, ABUSIVE, WHACK JOB!! *flail's in shock* I mean, "Kurama, I know you're in there! You've been in the bathroom for the past twenty minutes. What's taking you so long? And why's the door locked? ANSWER ME KURAMA!!" Hiei yelled at the top of his lungs outside the bathroom door.' *GNARF* One, That's the most Hiei's ever said at one time to date lol (er. Even though he's never actually said it.) Two, He. Can. Count? *lmfao* (okay, I shouldn't joke about that lest Hiei fans will kill me...) He counted to 20 minutes. Not once have I seen Hiei possess the patience to wait for 20 minutes, *or* count past 5. Basically, I loved those paragraph's esp. when you show how much of an impatient ass Hiei is by having him slice through the door. lol

Chapter 4: (Because I am getting tired of clicking the review button damnit)

Hiei said Fuck again. It's easier to digest because I can imagine Hiei *thinking* Fuck but draw up blank's when Hiei *says* Fuck. lol Hiei switches from, "WTF ARE YOU DOING IN THERE KURAMA?! YOU KNOW YOU AREN'T ALLOWED TO GO ANYWHERE WITHOUT ME FOR 5 MINUTES! WELL GUESS WHAT BITCH?! IT'S BEEN 20, TIME'S UP!" (lmfao @ my overimagination) to "Er. Did I just say that? My bad." *Thinks - 'I can't believe those fuckers. Kurama know's I OWN HIS ASS!'* *End's up looking like an idiot as Kurama put's him in his place*, "WTF?! OH NO HE DIDN'T!". (Er, again over active imagination. Then again it's 12:30 A.M. *eye twitch*). Yoko secretly reared his (utterly beautiful) head, that cold attitude of "Get out of my way or be food for my plant's" is *definitely* a Yoko thing. *nods very happily*

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From ANON - Kaorustalker30 (Formerly, Lurker) on April 03, 2005
It's 12 am. I'm desperate. For bishie sex. So I'm going to finally review. After having read this last year. *ahem* *prays her fingers are still working after she does this.* *whimpers*

Chapter 2 Review: (Because wtf happened to Chapter 1?!)

Yusuke. lol Only problem I have with Yusuke's characterization: He's thinking. A lot. (*blinks owlishly* Scareee *whistles*) Actually, I like Yusuke pensieve, even though in the anime he's always made out to be spontaneous and risky, I think for something like this; he'd be too worried to do anything else *but* think. Cute image - 'End up like Karasu with a rose growin' outta my chest' - I can actually see Yusuke thinking that.

Kurama. lmao Is it bad that I cannot think of Kurama idly thinking good thoughts? Translation: In almost every fanfic I've read, when Kurama's thinking of someone in particular, he's always thinking naughty thoughts. So much so that now I can no longer think, "Kurama's thinking about strategies." Now I think, "Kurama's strategically thinking of ways to get into someone's pants." I guess it's the youko/kitsune thing. Weird. I do like a naughty Kurama though - I mean he's bound to be horney after constantly screwing for 500+ years, dying, and then becoming a virgin again after being 'reborn' into someone else's body. *shakes away dirty images* The way you did that 'Kurama... Kurama... KURAMA... "KURAMA!"' thing was a good way to do a transition of thought.

Hiei. You. Had. Hiei. Say. Fuck. . . . *stares* . . . . I'm still not sure if that's a good thing or a bad thing. I mean, first time I read it, I bust out laughing from the shock of Hiei and Fucking in the same sentence. (You can tell I'm not a Kurama/Hiei fan. I used to be freaking avid. Then I found out Yusuke can go demon. HA. TAKE THAT HIEI!) Then I thought about it. And you traumatized me. Badly. -.- Hiei saying Fuck is funny. In a traumatic, scary, "Would Hiei actually say Fuck?" way. :p

Other than the trauma over Hiei and Fuck, you changed tenses a couple of time's (not like it actually mattered, I just noticed it because it's 12 A.M.!!!!! I actually like this chapter as an introduction. Very much so, it's quite good.

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From ANON - comicfancat on March 17, 2005
Not a bad chapter at all but what a wait to get it though.Are you going to have them keep the baby or maybe kursa(?) should make one more appearance and his part of the baby could fade out .After all Yusuke and Kurama still have many
things to sort out.
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From ANON - The Empress on March 17, 2005
Whoo hooo! Another Chappie! I kinda like the idea of Kurama being pregnant. I bet he looks so adorable. ^_^ I wanna know what the baby's going to look like. I also can't wait to read more. I want more. I will die if you don't write more. x_x *is going to die from lack of more chapters on story* please hurry and update. And also, I still love your story. ^_^
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From on March 16, 2005
I love this story!!! Oh I'm so happy you have Kurama the one pregnant! I'm so happy you updated, and you haven't lost this reviewer! So update soon, and I hope the baby doesn't have any of Karasu's genes, well anyway update soon!!!!!
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From ANON - kit-kit on March 15, 2005
great chapter im glad your back and im glad everything is fixed between yusuke and kurama. though maybe i can get a pregnant yusuke in a epigoue or a last chapter please please*give you big puppy dog eyes*
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From ANON - Kyoden on March 15, 2005
Thank you for FINALLY updating. Jk lol. This is definitely one of my fav stories of all time. Its very good. Im very glad you put Yusuke and Kurama back together. Some stupid writers would have left them apart and I hate them. I like the ending of this chapter. I like happy endings lol. Im sad there's only 2 chapters left, but I cant wait to read the ending. Thanx!!!

Ky
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From kogaluver on March 14, 2005
This is still one of my favorite stories. A prega Kurama, totally cool.
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From ANON - Sandi59 on March 14, 2005
I'm glad you are continuing this story. It was worth the wait. I look forward to the final chapters.
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From on February 18, 2005
Is Kurama-chan pregnant? Oh I can wait till the next update!!! Update faster!
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From ANON - The Empress on February 18, 2005
You know what? I forgot that Kurama is gay...so forget my earlier assumption that some girl is pregnant. Gosh I'm a dunce. Who is pregnant? Yusuke or Kurama? I get the feeling its Kurama. ^_^
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From ANON - The Empress on February 18, 2005
OMFG! Kurama's gonna be a father. Holy Crap! Who's the mother? What's gonna happen next? Huh? Huh? Huh? Please right more or I shall die from the suspence. Also, I love your story. ^_^
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