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Reviews for Alpha

By : Ametank
  • From ANON - nyoko kuro on February 09, 2005
    OMG! i totally disagree with this tanya whoever! i llove loonog stories and totally thjink you should extend this story to your intende length. you should be trying to please mostly yourself with this story any how. i for one, would be most unpleased if you finished this story in two chapters and you were unsatisfied. besides, hiei has to grow to love me more openly. It would be such a shame if you ended this wonderful story with a half-ass ending. please continue this story and update soon. forget tanya's review and shrug it off. dont worry about it. just think to yourself 'Tanya who?'
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  • From ANON - JuxtaposeHominid on February 09, 2005
    Hm. She may be right. There are several plot facets going, and this work does seem to be "straying from the tracks" slightly. Don't get me wrong, I love this story, but sometimes you can have too much of a good thing, if you understand my meaning. Still, I love to read this and am, myself, a novelist by nature (or so I like to think).

    J.H.
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  • From ANON - Sada-Z on February 09, 2005
    ^_^ I love it. I think it's great. I especially love fanfictions that are long. They keep me occupied because... >.> Well let's face it I have no life and have nothing better to do now that my friends don't have AOL anymore. So I think the way the story is going now is perfectly fine. I love and I hope you choose to keep it up. ^_^
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  • From ANON - crystal_moon13 on February 09, 2005
    And I don't care if your story has humor or not. It's great either way. It is nice to have humor in the story, but it's also nice to have a serious side to it. Just try to do a bit of both
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  • From ANON - crystal_moon13 on February 09, 2005
    OMG! If you end this story in two chapters then I will personally kill you! I won't let you do it! I love this story and I want it to go on for as long as it can. It is in NO way shape or form lagging! Your plot is going perfectly! I think you are a wonderful writer and you write great stories; please don't end this fic anytime soon! Keep up the good work and thanks for asking us readers for our opinion.
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  • From ANON - denise on February 09, 2005
    i would go for more humor purposes...i dunno thats just me, i don't thing the story is lagging at all! hey its your story, do what you want.
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 09, 2005
    Woah I think it's way too soon for you to start wrapping things up! I love your story and as long as you want to make it is fine, because it's kept my interest the whole way through and undoubtedly will until the very end be it two or fifteen chapters away. I personally think it should be longer because I don't feel it's dragging on and there are unresolved conflicts that I feel two chapters would not sufficiently wrap up. However, it's your choice and if you want to write it shorter go ahead and I'll still love your story I just personally wish it's as long as it was first intended to be.

    Oh and by the way this story is wonderful! I never gave you a review before because I'm not one to naturally review (I know it's horrible) but this question gave me the chance to review and I just want to say how awesome your story is! It's really enjoyable and the plot totally has my interest, and I just love your style of writing. Anyways, I hope my opinion helps some!
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  • From ANON - Serena on February 09, 2005
    hey, i would love the story to be longer, if it just ends like that it wouldn't be any fun!
    that's what i think,i love the way the story is going , so far, i have no complaints(sp?)
    i love it, can't wait til you update

    ^_^

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  • From ANON - animegirl007 on February 09, 2005
    For my two cents.....I don't think your story is dragging on...There are small elements missing from it at time...but, they can always be adjusted into the story at later points. I personally like the humor that I read so far. I read stories with than the chapters you are aiming for...and not every chapter not be pack with exticement, but they were neccesary for the plot.....In the end, the choice is yours to contince with the story or not...I hope you do...I would like to see how things end with Hiei, me and the pups.
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  • From KuwaLover on February 09, 2005
    I love reading long fics and I especially love the great amount and effort and detail you are putting into it. I would love for you to keep on writing as many chapters as you want. I hope the others feel the same I do, and if not, could you send me some of those chapters? I would love to read the entire story you have written down, and if it's not already written down, then the stuff that is in your head. I love this story! Thank you for listening to my request and thank you for having concern for your readers! I hope you will still continue this story.
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  • From ANON - Kayla on February 09, 2005
    I like how you're doing it now and I don't think you're drawing it out too much. I say continue the way you're doing it now, but then again I'm not you. It's your story and your choice.
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  • From ANON - whoever on February 09, 2005
    Your story is great! But add some humor for comic relief here and there. And it is just a tad bit long to me. But hey I like it and I'll continue to read it! Keep writing and I'll keep reading!
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  • From ANON - Quiescent Sanity on February 09, 2005
    hey... i really like your story and for some reason, i have never reviewed it before, for which i apologize. i actually read your story from mediaminer.org and i dont review much and sometimes when i do, i review once a day out of every story i read. i know i shouldve reviewed sooner but i dont know why i hadnt before and im sorry. i will try to review as much as i can for your stories. i really like reading this story along with your other hiei/you stories from e-fiction.org. i like how u write your stories and every story i read by u is one of the best ones. i hope you update soon
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  • From ANON - Tanya on February 08, 2005
    I love your story, its appsolutly great. But......(ya, there is always a but) I think your loosing the plot of the story and dragging it on further then need be. Im not saying you should rush it or anything, but (I dont know) I guess you could loose some of the "emotional" bit and get more into humor (Im feeling sappy vibes from this story now). Now I dont mean you should add 'smut' or anything, that would really be a turn around without cause, but be creative (I know you'll think of something)

    PS: I dont read fanfiction anymore, i get to busy. Your story is the only one I do read (I get the e-mails ^__^) so It would be kinda disapointing if this story looses its spunk.

    Funny always works when things start to get.....difficult (Difficult--Something is making me feel like I spelt that wrong.....)
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  • From ANON - Neoki Jaganshi on February 07, 2005
    hiei is all pissy! he so cute...... i cant wiat for my brother to visit....thank you for updating yur storu
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