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By : mhmartini
  • From BlueUtopiah on September 14, 2005
    That whole chapter hit so close to home for me, it practically has my address.

    Loving the marionette metaphor when Kurama was told about his level of clearance in Spirit World. I also like the dirty citrus scene (I'll tell you why I'm snickering about that later.) So much stood out for me: Shioru talking about the rings, Kurama's twisted stomach, Hiei rubbing heated circles on his back, but my favourite is Hiei burning the nurse. I wish I could've done that during some of my hospital stays!

    You carried alot more emotion in this chapter, it made me feel warm.

    Gods, that chapter was wondefully long, you totally made my night. Keep that writing bug in a cage and feed it well!
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  • From ANON - Sil on September 14, 2005
    Loved last chapter, it was kind of sad and sweet at the same time. I can't believe next will be the last chapter!I can't wait for it, but, at the same time, i don't want this story to end!!Please, tell me you'll be writing more stories about hiei and kurama, even if you'll make kurama suffer, as long as they end up together!!^_^
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  • From ANON - Suryallee on September 14, 2005
    Hope you got my Mail review.
    I love this chapter!
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  • From EnchanteNoir on September 14, 2005
    ::Sniffles unable to help it and grabs her tissue box:: OMG that was so lovely. This chapter I think... was the best one... so full of emotion, so much love, helplessness, and hope. It was the most touching thing I have read in a long time. Keep up the good work and I look forward to the next chapter... this one was just... wow... amazing...absolutely amazing... I was touched... very touched.
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  • From ANON - Vampire Ifurita on September 08, 2005
    Oh. My. God!!! This is one of the best KH stories I've ever read! (and I've read quite a few) My heart just goes out to the poor tortured fox and his beloved fire demon as they suffer the worst of everything. I just want to cuddle them and tell them that everything will be alright in the end. You are such a wonderful writer. I mean, WOW! It touches me to read this story. I couldn't stop reading it today (spent practically all day reading it) and I simply can't wait for more! Oh I can't wait! Beautiful story! Wonderfully written! I bow down and worship you. *praises*
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  • From BlueUtopiah on September 06, 2005
    This chapter hit so close to home for me. I'd pick Genkai and Yukina over ningen hospitals any day but, unfortunately, Kurama did not have much of a choice. I liked your point of view on King Enma hating Kurama and Hiei - it does make sense after all, they did steal the artifcacts...but the tubes and IV's and the respirator...gyahhhh....

    Hey, if it makes me uncomfortable, if it makes me wince, that means it's well done. You're just making us all look bad now, with the crazy updates and the goodness.

    The entire fight scene was wonderful - I was wondering how you were going to explain Hiei not using the DOTDF, and you did so very well - he does need alot of mental control and stamina to use it - both of which he did not have at that time. I loved Kurama's re-entry into his human body - the non-usgae, the pain, the disorientation was all beautifully written.

    I'm so driving down to celebrate with you when it's all finished!
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  • From ANON - Suryallee on September 06, 2005
    Thats exactly what I meant, koenma is a child-rule, he isn´t grown up now but his father gives me creeps all the time i read a fik with him inside. Thats also why I dont like the entire happy chappy reikei thing the most uses, its based of some very wrong asumptions abaut the good and bad. In the later series when enma gives the order out to kill yusuke, that was not the first time I realised that the reikei is to taken very sereosly and with back thoughts all the time.
    But thats my thoughts about this all and must not the meaning of every body else.
    Poor kurama!
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  • From ANON - hColleen on September 06, 2005
    I've seen people trussed up in the ICU....it's difficult too look at, even if they're not one of yours...scary...it's hard to be reminded of your own moratlity while looking at someone barely hanging onto theirs. I look forward to the fluff...it'll be a healing anodyne to the angst...even if there is some agnst in the fluff. I'm happy and surprised you got this chapter out so quickly. Thank you...and congratulations on almost being finished with your baby :D Thank you very much for sharing.
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  • From ANON - Eye of Ra on September 06, 2005
    awww.. sad... and sweet.. all at once! i *love* it! ^^ beautiful, as usual. the poor things...


    Ra
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  • From ANON - shiorifoxiesmom on September 06, 2005
    Oh boy, an update on one of my favorite stories. Yeah the Kurama torture is over. Hurray for fluff. Update soon.
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  • From ANON - comicfancat on September 06, 2005
    Well its 12.15 am here and I was going past your web site and saw the new chapter,no I couldn't wait till after I got up so I read it open mouthed and nearly crying again wow.It seemed like something Kurama would do to protect his Hiei and his friends(a bonus).And believably that Ema would pull something like that after they got rid of a major threat and all,plus you'd think the hospital would report this after all Kurama's gone through way to much.Anyway,my heart hurts after all this and am hoping for some really long nice fluff for Hiei and Kurama and much needed play time along with the healing.What happened to Kurama's tail and how do you restore the pain from that(ouch)? If I didn't know he gets through this only to go through some family stuff later I'd think you like having us bitting our nails reading your stuff.Not really complaining,I love your stories and have passed them on to some friends to read and can't wait for the next chapter and wondering when the 3rd one starts.Oh and wondering if it'll be Kurama's mom or Hiei that lets him know how much closer Hiei and Kuramas mom are getting?
    Great job..... :)
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  • From ANON - Sil on September 06, 2005
    I can´t believe it's the end for the fox torture! (although i think it's just momentary) That means that next chapter i won´t be biting my nails while i'm reading, and that's good, cause i have no nails left after last chapters.
    I´ll be waiting for the fluffness!!
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  • From ANON - Dark Delta on September 05, 2005
    wow I just loved the line "Move, or you’ll be lucky you’re in the hospital already.” That was fucking cool That was perfect of Hiei
    keep up the good job
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  • From ANON - Mea on September 05, 2005
    That was a wonderful chapter. I liked the way you put the fact that Enma hates demons. That's the exact impression that I got from those last episodes of the sensui saga. It's a little funny because I voiced my thoughts on the issue to thoth-moon. She didn't really agree with me. But I did say that Reikai hated demons, but Koenma and Botan are from Reikai and seem to not care about the fact that their friends are demons. Maybe she misunderstood me. Oh well, at least I know that I'm not alone in thinking that Enma hates demons. You know, that might make an interesting fanfiction story. Sorry about saying all this in a review, I know that you don't like it. Please update soon!
    Sincerely Mea ^_^
    PS- I think after all this angst I have gone numb. Some future fluff would be nice. ^_^
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  • From EmbersEye on September 05, 2005
    I must say that it's good to be back. That last chapter was amazing. Everything flowed perfectly. You didn't take the easy way out and rely on a deus ex machina to fix everything. Enma's interference wasn't expected and I've rarely ever seen someone pull from that segment of the canon for their fanfiction before, but it made perfect sense and added another tragic layer to the whole incident. I don't think that everything leading up to this point would have had as much of an impact if Hiei had rescued Kurama, they were all taken back to spirit world, healed, and then lived happily ever after. I commend you for putting so much of yourself into this story. It's truly a magnificent piece of work. Thank you for sharing this and allowing all of us to experience the events of this story so superbly.
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