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Reviews for Coming Clean

By : mhmartini
  • From ANON - Skwishee on May 21, 2005
    Man, I just adore this story. You write so well. Even the gaps in time are made to transission well so it doesn't leave you going "WTF happened" ^___^ That's a problem alot of authors have but you seem to have risen above all that. All your stories are just awesome. As for this last batch of chapters, which I nearly fell out of my chair because I was so excited about seeing them...I think it was a very cool twist that you made Hiei go blind. It was the perfect opportunity for him to open up, even if it almost forced him to, he needed it. Gave him time to review what really matters. And you've done an excellent job in portraying the emotions in the story. I won't take up your time with a long review....but I have to just say that this is one of my favorite fics and I am eagerly awaiting the next parts!!! Keep up the magnificent work.
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  • From ANON - Skwishee on May 21, 2005
    Man, I just adore this story. You write so well. Even the gaps in time are made to transission well so it doesn't leave you going "WTF happened"
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  • From ANON - hColleen on May 21, 2005
    This was not so long in coming...I could still remember what chapter you'd left off with before...or that may have been the little note you added to the summary...I do like this story and am glad that you're enjoying writing it.

    I only caught a couple of errors....a couple of times where the word "front" was when it should have been "forward" a "tot he" instead of "to the" and a strange "AlLII" or something like that in the last chapter....nothing huge...and I know how hard it is to catch everything on your own...I know I've put out a few errors in my stories...I even know of one place where I stuck a fragment, but haven't bothered to fix it yet....ah, wells... :D

    I look forward to your next chapter, as well as to the next installment of Bugs :D
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  • From ANON - Everqueen on May 21, 2005
    WOW, I just read all your latest posts. I feel so bad for Hiei and loved Yusuke and Kuwabara's acceptance of the two demons. I'm glad Hiei is getting better and that Kurama is too now. I would write a longer review, but it's almost 2 am. and I'm tired.
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  • From ANON - Dark Delta on May 21, 2005
    wow! huge updated I can barely keep my eyes open for reading late at night but damn it it was so worth it. Oh my gosh poor fox that Intaro bastard should rot great chapters they are so good and and my one word to described this is fantastic keep it up you have talent.
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  • From ANON - Everqueen on May 19, 2005
    WOW, Hatanaka was an ass. I'm so glad that kurama has Hiei back with him though and what a great love scene. I almost never read ones where Hiei doesn't know what sex is and I always love it. YAY
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  • From ANON - hColleen on May 18, 2005
    Mass updates are a good and bad thing....good cause I get to read more of your wonderful story...bad because I have to remember what chapter I last read....at least you didn't leave a horrid cliffy this time...I like that you have Hiei a bit discomfitted by the lack of control over his body...I'm a little more than half tempted to go and read the next chapter again before you post it here, though....please update soon...I only ask because I know you have them written... :D
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  • From ANON - Mz.Bitz.` on May 17, 2005
    I HAD MISSED SO MUCH WHILE MY COMPUTER WAS DOWN!! ::jumps on computer repeatly:: GAHHHH ::tapes it back together:: Omgosh that was BEAUTIFUL. JUST OMGOODNESS. :)
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  • From ANON - Dark Delta (not signed in) on May 17, 2005
    I can only described this in one word 'beautiful' great job
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  • From ANON - Eye of Ra on May 17, 2005
    aw. even though i live for the angst.. none of it is really worth it without those precious tender moments like that... to.. i dont know, perhaps validate the pain? ^^ beautiful, as usual. ^__^
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 16, 2005
    The 'shadow ball' you refere to is called a Spirit of Words.
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  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on May 16, 2005
    Well it was certainly a good lemon and I did get the emotional value of it... I would say or rather type more, but my clockwork hurts so much. *waves* Bye.
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  • From ANON - forbbiden_child on May 07, 2005
    Who ever new Hiei could be so caring? It was rather sweet, actually. Did Kurama recieve a small bonsai tree? They tend to be very fragile... and they apparently
    need water very often. Hn, I wish someone would have told me that before "Spring Break". *Eyes the dying tree* Hn. And does Keiko really believe that Yusuke, of all people is going to stay in school for more then ten minutes? Is she insane?
    I've asked enough rhetorical questions. Now for a bunch of compliments; saying I enjoyed this chapter was a given. I was happily suprised when Koenma showed genuine concern for Botan, and I enjoyed a confused, rather sweet Hiei. I look foward to the next chapter, and to Kurama getting out of the hospital.

    Respectfully,
    ~f.c.
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  • From ANON - Eternalpain91 on May 04, 2005
    great fic u better countinue or else
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  • From ANON - thoth_moon on May 02, 2005
    Damn, I missed some major update fest or something. FOUR chapters I had to catch up on! ^__^ Eh, it was worth it. Poor Hiei, it really must be traumatic recieiving that, ahem, unpleasant gift from the Intaro guy (least, I think that was Intaro, right?) He must think Kurama's dead or something... or did you write that? Sorry, my littlest sister was watching "X-Men: Evolution" while I was reading, so I couldn't rightly concentrate.

    Oh, and at the risk of being attacked by those who misunderstand, yay! Some Fox torture! Yes, I'm a sick, twisted sadist, but I don't care! XP The author knows what I mean, and that's all that matters, right?

    Well anyhow, this chapter did clarify something for me. I knew that Yukina found out because Hiei accidentally cried in front of her, but I never knew what the circumstances might be. Well, now I know, huh? LOL thoth_moon's a little hyper right now. Yes, anyways, I'll have to make sure that I don't miss the next (four! ^_^) update again, eh? Hope it's sometime soon, but no pressure now!
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