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Reviews for Coming Clean

By : mhmartini
  • From ANON - hColleen on May 02, 2005
    Wow...multichapter updates...confusled the poor 'Colleen-girl...anyways...I think Hiei seeking advice and giving his fox the baby tree was absolutely sweet! And yay for demonic healing abilities getting Kurama out of the hospital so quickly (both his own and Yukina's)...I'm currently reading the last chapter you updated (14)...but I wanted to get comments down before I forgot them....14 is a difficult chapter to read (I'm sure it was difficult to write, too)...I just had a nitpicking moment (most people wouldn't even notice) but "prone" is face-down..."supine" is face-up....as I said, most people wouldn't notice or even know...and "a good place to stop"? Methinks you're a sadist! Anyways. I really do enjoy your stories very much. Thank you :D
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  • From ANON - Everqueen on May 01, 2005
    Oh, so mean. Bad cliffie. Who is breaking in and poor Kurama. Then Yukina finds out, wow, what a great chapter. Makes me want to read more.
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  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on April 25, 2005
    I love Yusuke¤Keiko moments. They are such a sweet couple.... *grabs her tissues*
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  • From ANON - Everqueen on April 24, 2005
    What a great chapter. HEHE, I love Keiko's parents, especially the last comments about how yusuke and Keiko did better then they had. I'm glad that Kurama is recovering so nicely though. And the tree part was very cool. Thanks so much.
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  • From ANON - Mz.Bitz. on April 24, 2005
    YAY, things are taking a turn. Well the one thing that stuck out in thsi chapter, for me, was the line "Yusuke answered, 'When I realized you are more important than my bad-ass image.'" OMGOSH, that tore into my heart and made me make AWWW sounds. Usually, I don't care much for Yusuke and Keiko, but that was just so cute.
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  • From ANON - hColleen on April 24, 2005
    This chapter is sweet, and reassuring. Almost a break from the angst that came before and will come after...a calm in the storm. Much enjoying this story :D
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  • From ANON - thoth_moon on April 23, 2005
    Oh my gosh that was so funny at the end, when Keiko and Yusuke got caught! ^__^ Oh man, it seems that usually the lovers get ripped a new one much worse when they get caught by the GIRL'S parents rather than the boy's- isn't that annoying? Oh, I can NOT wait to see how that one plays out (though I'm pretty sure that Mr. Yukimura doesn't kill Yusuke, huh? XD) Yay, Yukina got to healing Kurama, maybe now he can leave the damn hospital for a little while at least, huh? I'll look forward to seeing what happens in the next chapter (such as, how badly does Yusuke get beaten up by the parents Yukimura).
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  • From ANON - Stacy on April 23, 2005
    To Anon,
    Shut your fucking mouth you homophobic freak of pond scum. If i knew where you lived I'd come and beat the fucking shit out of you. That's so mean to call somebody a bed buddy when they aren't.
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  • From ANON - Everqueen on April 21, 2005
    Great chapter. Opps, Keiko and Yusuke got caught. HEHE Glad that Yukina went and healed Kurama and that Shiori was smart enough to put it together that Hiei is Yukina's sister. Can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - comicfancat on April 21, 2005
    Wow you let Kurama's mom in on more than I thought you would.though I'm glad she said nothing
    to Hiei's sister.If nothing else showing respect to Hiei with that,that I hope Hiei act knowledges some where along the line.It was better to not heal him all the way after all how would that be explained.
    Look forward to the chapters of bugs and yeah I know what you mean about it ending(yet all good things do) Will look for the 3rd installment as well ,can't imagine what the topic would be yet know I will not be disappointed i'm sure. Nicely done so far :)
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  • From ANON - hColleen on April 21, 2005
    I do really enjoy the depth of character development, the tenderness, the sharpness of Shiori. I do think Yukina has a backbone. I don't think she would have survived or withstood the torment inflicted on her by ....what's his name...if she didn't have a back bone (I'm not good with names). I think she's a lot like silk...soft, supple, but very strong. Enjoying this :D
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  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on April 21, 2005
    Like I said before about the thief. Anyway, I'm glad that Yukina's being tough in this, but not you know... a butch? Forgive the derrogatory term. I tend to use it freely when it descibes me so well. I hardly find it offensive.
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  • From ANON - forbbiden_child on April 21, 2005
    Yet another chapter, yet another work of arte. I find it most endearing and charming; the fact that you like the positive feedback everyone is giving you. As you may or may not be aware of, you deserve every nice comment directed towards you, for your writing is most advanced and lovely. I liked the way Yukina was portrayed; I too have imagined Yukina to be stronger than she let on. I'm also very pleased that someone finally portrayed Hiei and a more sexually innocent demon then such a seductive one, because I doubt he has had any sexual relationships with anyone, and you portrayed that fantasticaly.I apologize for writing such a long review, but I felt it necesary to explain how perfectly you portray your characters, and how well written this is. I am... 'patiently' awaiting the next chapter of your story (or as patiently as anyone with the name 'forbbiden child' can wait). Write soon.

    ~Respectfully
    fobrbiden_child
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  • From ANON - Botan on April 21, 2005
    Hi ya it's me the girl who can be really annoying. Okay here's the news on Animespiral theif. *Changes voice to match ogre* Smartstar has taken off Coming clean I repeat that she/he has taken of coming clean that is all. *changes voice back to Botan's* Anyway so that's the news. I can't wait to read your updation on Bugs. Anyway update soon. Later. Botan PS if you would be so kind to review some of my stories on both ff.net and animespiral.com both under Kayko15 and on anime spiral I also have one under Botan15. Thanks Later.
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  • From ANON - forbbiden_child on April 20, 2005
    As you can see from the name, I adore Hiei, and I now officially adore you for writing a fic as lovely as this. I usually never review stories, unless I'm insulting someone, but you my dear have earned my respect by writing this fic. Not only is your writing tasteful and descriptive, but it whets the appetite and made me crave for more. Never have I actually read something and have enjoyed it so thoroughly. I hope you update quickly, for this is definitely the best fan fic I've ever read of all time.

    ~Respectfully,
    forbbiden_child
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