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Reviews for The Burning of Ice

By : Suryallee7104
  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on May 04, 2005
    Yeah Hiei-sama! I didn't think that he'd go that far... well he threatened Koenma before I think, but not over someone else. Maybe Yukina? Oh Kazzy! Check my facts!
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  • From ANON - Suryallee on May 02, 2005
    Thank you Altar!
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  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on May 02, 2005
    Ah that was funny as hell! I can still hear Keiko cursing at Hiei and Kurama like that! Okay now to the English lesson!

    Dialogue is usually put in, "double quotation marks like so."

    Right here it should be, "And Kurama, I know you’re in this fucking tree too!"
    Of course if it were me, I'd say something like this, "And Kurama, I know you’re in the fucking tree with him so get down here!"

    Also, I'm not going to give you direct spellings of words because I believe that would be insulting to your intelligence. Buy an English dictionary to check your spellings against an American standard dictionary. My sister and I usually sound things out and then check them.

    Another thing is the endings to words. Someone mentioned that you're having trouble with tenses. You know, words with endings like asking, asked, and asks.

    Don't forget modifiers! I really hate those things! It would pain me greatly to explain them since I can't personally explain how they work! Check out this website:

    http://www.uottawa.ca/academic/arts/writcent/hypergrammar/useavaj.html

    Please, anyone else feel free to call me out if I give misinformation!
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  • From Atropa on May 02, 2005
    Two stalkers sitting in a tree.... *hmmm* Nope, wont even go there.
    Very nice chapters. I liked them a lot... Keep up the good work and imagination!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 01, 2005
    UPDATE!!! :)
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  • From ANON - bell on May 01, 2005
    I love it so far!!! please update!
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  • From Atropa on May 01, 2005
    I am glad to see that you decided to put this story up again. And I agree with one of the speakers to your little note you made - if you get such a review that says "I didnt like your story and I won't continue reading it..." well let that be his or hers choice - they don't know what they are missing... *s* I have gotten some of those as well, and at first they hurt, but now I just shrugs them off my shoulders.
    So keep your spirit up - your English is just fine... and you should definitive continue writing!!
    *pats your back*
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  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on May 01, 2005
    OMG! Thank you for putting this back up! (OMG! I ended a sentence with a preposition but who cares? I'm so happy!) *dances around the room* Remember what I said in my other review!
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