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By : Suryallee7104
  • From ANON - Anon on August 03, 2005
    awww i cant wait till u update again but family comes first i understand so as a faithful reader ill be waiting paitently for ur update^^
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  • From ANON - Frosty D (u know!) on August 02, 2005
    Her classmates where too (1) loudly (2) in the bus and she felt nauseated from the events before, all the time!

    Alrighty... (1) the ending can be dropped-- no "ly" (2) it should be "on" that's one specific example I can point out to you. I hope it was helpful to you because I am no English major. *is scared of school anyway*

    So Mukuro's starting to notice that Hiei's finally been laid huh? I hope that she doesn't meddle too much!
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  • From ryukotsusei on August 02, 2005
    Poor Keiko, hopefully she finds the love she need with Hiei. Update soon please.
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  • From ANON - The Green Knight on August 02, 2005
    Hey you're not a slave you know! XD Take you time 'cause it's your time and no one elses! Emergencies are important!
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  • From ANON - Suryallee on July 31, 2005
    If he keeps up that pase...°__°! Joke, hey she is only thouteen by now!!!
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  • From ANON - Frost Dragon on July 31, 2005
    Here's what I think: I think that Hiei's going to end up with a Hiei jr! Haha! I am having so much fun reading stories from you!
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  • From bitBlackmage on July 30, 2005
    It's getting better. Still, there are some prepositions where it's better to leave them out. *licking the Hiei/Keiko lemon*
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  • From ANON - Suryallee on July 29, 2005
    NOO!
    She put all your names together and made out of them this stupid Altra chant!
    She heard me complain about the ideots who let you feel bad some time ago and asked me of who I seak of in her way of asking, I told her then that I have someone with the name Altar who I talk with mostly. and some of the events that made me that angry.
    Somehow she must have thought I only mean you when I told her happy birthday form you all and so she began to chant her, well, little chant the entire day!
    Dont ask me how she came up with that!
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  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on July 29, 2005
    Question, does you daughter really think that I am the "bad" one? *falls back laughing*
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  • From bitBlackmage on July 29, 2005
    Yummy. I got really hot reading that! Lol. Hiei's a seductive prick! I have to agree witht he above reviewer! Keiko really is a lucky girl!
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  • From ryukotsusei on July 29, 2005
    Good chapter, Keiko is extremely lucky. Can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon please.
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  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on July 27, 2005
    Hey Sury-san! Happy birthday to your daughter!
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  • From ANON - InTheShadows on July 27, 2005
    Wow! That was awesome this is for the 2 chapters after the author's note. Lol The story is going great. I don't mind the pairings and I have nothing against it. Update soon!!! ^^

    -InTheShadows.
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  • From ANON - The Green Knight on July 27, 2005
    Oh yeah... Tell your daughter that the wacky Green Knight said to have a Happy Birthday!
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 27, 2005
    awww thats sooo sweet wat keiko did for hiei and now hiei's has finally admitted to himself that he likes keiko awwwww thats soooooo swwwweeeeet
    love your story keep up the great work^^
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