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By : KuwaLover

From ANON - Kitkat on February 01, 2016
I know it's been long since the last update, but please write more. Pretty please?
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From ANON - Chocolate Milk on July 19, 2007
“Hey, MAW?”

Yes?

“I, um, found another… m’take.”

What was that? Speak up.

“I found another… mistake… in your writing.”

Really?

“Um… yeah?”

Where? What is it?

“It’s right here…”

‘This girl, likes this story, and wants to see it continued. She realizes ‘the’ you, cher auteur, are most likely busy with life, and do not have to resume it.’

“It should be ‘that’. Not ‘the’.”

Oh.

“MAW?”

Yes?

“I think that you are a good writer, and… everyone makes mistakes, no matter how good they are at whatever they do, and it’s okay to make mistakes every now and then… What really matters is realizing that you made a mistake, and then be able to learn from it…”

Thank you, I… I really needed to hear that.

“MAW… Are you okay?”

Oh, no, I’m fine… You should probably get out of this room, though.

“Dare I ask… Why?”

I’m just going to destroy it. In five… four… three…

“You really need to learn how to handle your perfectionism.”

Two…

“I’m out!”

One.
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From ANON - Chocolate Milk on July 19, 2007
“Hey, My Ability to Write, guess what?”

You’re smiling… this cannot be good… What is it?

“I found something… something…”

Uh, I don’t think you’ve got down how the whole ‘dramatic pause’ thing works yet, idiot… Why are you still smiling? I just insulted you…

“Heh, I know, but nothing you say can get to me right now. Because… I just found out that you ‘are’ capable of error in your writing.”

What?! I am not! I am your infallible Ability to Write! How dare you even think that I-!

“Would you shut up! You made a mistake, see?”

‘It was amazing. And now, because of what he had said, this young girl always questions herself, “Is this Kuwabara-like?” before she make a decision…’

“See, right there, it should be ‘makes’. Turns out you’re not so ‘infallible’, after all.”

Well… I… Stop laughing at me!

“Your over-confidence is your weakness.”

Your faith in your friends is yours… Oh, wait, you don’t have any friends!

“… Ow. That hurt…”

Well, you deserved it. Laughing at me like that… Hey, hey! What are you doing!? Stop-stop crying! Don’t-

“I’m sorry, I-I… I can’t… I-”

No! don’t you start! I’m-I’m sorry! I’m sorry, I didn’t mean it, alright! … Hey, wait a minute, are you laughing?!

“… Ye-yeah. What? It was funny! You sounded so panicked… It was hilarious!”

You-you-you manipulative fiend! I can’t believe you’d…

“Hey… I’m sorry, alright, I won’t do it again, I mean it. I shouldn’t have played with you like that…”

… You’re doing it right now, aren’t you?

“Yeah.”

… Why do you love Star Wars so much?
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From ANON - Chocolate Milk on July 19, 2007
Once upon a time, there was a young girl. Now, this particular girl had just lost her Father, and was consumed by grief, but, in her Father’s absence, she was able to finally discover the internet, (which her Father had always hogged.)

One night, as the girl was looking up stuff by typing random words in the search-box, she came across a picture. The picture was of an orange-haired man, who wielded a sword forged of beautiful golden light. She was entranced by this man, and thought it was fate that had showed him to her. She spent the next few hours trying to gather all the information she could on him.

When she learned more of this man’s nature and personality, she quickly knew that he would forever be her favorite character- nay, her one true hero, an idol to try and be somewhat like. Honest and kind, strong and gentle, brave and strong. He was all this, yet he was more. He was the essence of what a human ‘should’ be.

Yes, he was human. And, as is the very nature of all humans, he was flawed. But the thing that was different about this man, the thing that made him what a human should be, was that he did not let his flaws get in the way of what he really was, he did not use his flaws as an excuse to hurt. And that, my friend, is what really drew this young girl to him.

The girl was happy, for a while. But, that ended, when she found out about all of those who disliked, and even went so far as to hate, her hero of mankind. She was confused, but her confusion quickly gave way to anger. She would fume for hours, but, she was alone, so she could only rant about the indignities of this to herself. What a fool she was.

However, not too long later, she realized that being angry over this was pointless. It didn’t solve anything, did it? It didn’t. And what made her realize this, was something her brother had said…

‘Hey, this whole ‘fuming over people hating Kuwabara’ thing seems kind of… un-Kuwabara-like, don’t you think?’

He was right, she knew. Her stupid brother was ‘actually’ right. It was amazing. And now, because of what he had said, this young girl always questions herself, “Is this Kuwabara-like?” before she make a decision… And to think, this all came about because her Father died of-

“Hey, My Ability to Write. Whatcha doin’?”

Umm…

“Hey! Are you giving the story of why I love Kuwabara so much out to perfect strangers again?!”

Maybe…

“You are! You jerk! You’d better delete this…”

What!? But I think I actually wrote it pretty good this time! It’s so poignant…

“Don’t you dare start with the big, stupid words that nobody uses!”

Ugh, poignant is a two syllable word, you artless idiot, and plenty of people use it!

“Plenty? Only if you count all those depressing, wannabe poets… Anyway, I don’t want anyone to see this.”

Why? The author of this story is obviously a Kuwabara lover, it’s not like she would make fun of you…

“I know that… it’s not her I don’t want seeing this… This is a review. That means that anyone can see it. And, in case you didn’t notice, this is kind of weird!”

… So? This is the internet, no one will know who you are. You can joke around and be weird. Hell, anyone who reads this will probably think that it’s a joke… Besides, it’s not as though you have anything better to do.

“… I guess you’re right. I sigh the sigh of the one who stands corrected, now… Sighing, sighing, sighing… Alright, that’s enough sighing! Oh, yeah, which story is this?”

‘A Binding Promise’, by KuwaL, now known as SinkingIntoDarkness. You remember that one, right? You were so happy when you found it all those months ago…

“A Binding… Oh, yeah! I remember… That’s the one where Kuwa is Hiei’s slave- I mean, ‘servant’…”

Would you quit your lecherous chuckling!? It annoys me… Anyway, what is the real point of this?

“I thought you would know that. After all, you are My Ability to Write, you ‘should’ know…”

Why do I have to know 'everything'? … Alright, let me think… this is because… this story has been on-hold for so long that you’re about to make me write out an ending so that you may have closure, but I never write the ending that you want, no matter how good it is, you unappeasable monster, so you are making a last-ditch effort to try and make the author remember this story, even though you don’t know if she has indeed forgotten it, and even though she said she would finish it, and even though you know that she’s probably too busy with her life to be bothered by you and your boring one.

“… Wow, that’s a long sentence. Maybe you should cut it up a little?”

Ugh! I don’t have time for that! And since ‘when’ do you critique ‘me’?

“Ever since I got tired of it being the other way around.”

You cheeky… Whatever. This is getting really long, can you wrap it up?

“Hey! You started this, you jerk! And how do you expect me to efficiently beg if can’t make this really long?”

Just say, ‘please continue’ and hope against hope that our cher auteur listens.

“That never works, and you know it. I have to beg in a way that doesn’t seem too desperate, or obvious, for that matter, but I have to catch the writer’s attention, and then hold it long enough to guilt-trip her… It’s very hard, you know.”

… Only you could make begging into an art, you manipulative fiend. And what is it with you and guilt-tripping? That seems to be the only way you know how to get things from other people…

“Well, I would try bribing, but I’ve got nothing to bribe anyone with!”

… You really need to get a life, you know that?

“Well, duh. Of course I know that! But, acquiring a life is very hard to do when you’re home-schooled and live in the middle of no where with no one around for miles. And even harder when you have no means of transportation besides someone you hate and no social skills because your parents-”

Too much information! Alright, what I am saying is, you don’t need to make it so apparent that you don’t have a life by writing these incredibly long things, understand?

“Well, yeah… But, this is a fun way to pass the time! It’s like you said, I have absolutely nothing better to do than sit in a comfy chair and stare at a computer monitor all day. I mean, at least it’s better than just watching television!”

I can hardly see how this is any better than what your brother does. Alright, alright! That’s enough! Just say what you want to say so this can stop!

“Fine… I can’t do it! MAW, please, do it for me. Please!”

Wow, you’re actually pretty good at begging… Fine, I’ll do it… Ahem. This girl, likes this story, and wants to see it continued. She realizes the you, cher auteur, are most likely busy with life, and do not have to resume it. But, she likes your work, it makes her happy, and she would probably wet herself like an exited puppy if this ever updated. She also knows, if you should, god forbid, find and read this, that you don’t have to respond in any way, you can just ignore it.

“Yeah! I don’t expect a reply… Besides, I had (am having) a lot of fun writing this! It’s all I can ever have fun with, really…”

Ah, stop! Before you start crying! Just remember, this life isn’t all that bad… You’ve got high-speed internet, Tivo, a bitchin’ Mp3 player, Napster, Netflix, a DVD player that plays discs from every region, a Mother who is an eBay master…

“But I don’t have any friends!”

All of Yu Yu Hakusho on DVD…

“… You’re right, this life isn’t that bad.”

Oh, thank goodness… Okay, I’m serious, this must be ended, now. So hurry it up!

“Oh, fine, fine. I’ll stop. Just let me speak to the author right quick…"

"Dear KuwaL, as I will always know you as, I really like this story, it would take a while to list all the reasons why, so I won’t try, but, just rest assured that I would only use really good adjectives to describe it… Man, I’m border-lining on loving this thing… Hell, I like-border-line-love all of your stories, and that’s not just my overwhelming love of Kuwabara and Hiei/Kuwa talking."

"You’re a good writer, which has been proven by me coming back here every month or so to see if you’ve updated anything. MAW was right to say that I would probably wet myself if this updated, really. So, whether you update, or don’t, just know, I’ll still reread your stories every couple months. Because… I do really like them. That’s all.”

…Whoa. You can give some really… poignant speeches.

“Again with that stupid word!”

Heh… Alright, I think this is a good way to end this extremely long thing. So… Bye?

“No. That’s too… oddly anticlimactic.”

You just love Tuguro, don’t you?

“No one is going to get that joke.”

You’re probably right.
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From ANON - Sneere on November 07, 2006
i DESPERATLY await an update from this GLORIUSE story.
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From ANON - wouldnt-u-like-2-no on November 07, 2006
plz...more?
PLZ!
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From ANON - argh on November 07, 2006
how much must we beg before u update? HOW MUCH!?!?!?!?
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From ANON - stolen on July 26, 2006
is it just me or is the conversation yuskue had with kuwa when he comes for hiei a lot like the one hiei has with yukina when he comes for her?
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From ANON - stolen on July 26, 2006
ok! im back! wow! u updated quite a bit!...but still no love? damn! WHY!?!?!
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From ANON - Sneere on July 26, 2006
marvalouse....NOW GET ON WITH IT!!!!...plz?
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From ANON - sol on July 26, 2006
yay! u updated!...DO IT AGAIN!!!
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From ANON - LuvURSkin on July 25, 2006
u have a very interesting way of spelling "Hiei" my friend URBitch....
but yes, this is very interesting and we are all waiting in much suspense so please do continue as soon as possible...
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From ANON - URBitch on July 25, 2006
this thing is soo...is it possible for something to be extremely cool andcute at the same time?
omG! were is heie!? is he ok!? i must know!? Tell me! TELL ME NOW!!!...plz?
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From ANON - Scar on July 15, 2006
I realy like this story and i love how it works with the original story line it's realy great i cant wait for you to update :)
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From ANON - Joivanwolfgirl on July 09, 2006
Nice chapter, It about time you update! Will, I looking forward to the next chapter. I wonder how it will go this time, I really hope Kuwabara won't get hurt too much. Anyway, update sooner!
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