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By : chilli
  • From ANON - Kamryn on September 13, 2006
    This is a great story. Great plot development and long intersting chapters. I'm glad that Kurama and Yusuke have everything straightened out now. Is it really over? I'd love to see more of this (especially interested in Hiei/Kuwabara and the kits!) Yusuke's way of saying I love you made me smile ;-)
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  • From BlueUtopiah on September 12, 2006
    Wonderful. I never saw the twist coming, never expected that King Enma had a hand in it. I like the fact that he was afraid of Hiei and Kurama teaming up, when Yusuke and Kurama would make just as formidable a team! You wrapped this up quite nicely, involving everyone including Genkai (which you get so many points for).

    I liked the exploration of Yusuke and Kurama's true feelings for each other, they were trying to decide whether their realtionship was merely forced or if it had truly blossomed into something deeper, and I liked Yusuke's almost innocent charm when it came to convincing Kurama of his love.

    The Hiei/Kuwabara scenes were humourous as well, I thoroughly enjoyed this story and I hope you continue to write for the fandom!
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  • From ANON - Nahau on September 12, 2006
    This chapter was absolutely awesome!!! I hope that you make a sequel or something. Let is know what happens to the kits. I also would like to know what happens between Hiei and Kuwabara. You're a great writer and I would like to see more of your fics. I'm a huge fan of Yusuke and Kurama because Kurama and Hiei is so over done. Thanks so much for sharing!
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  • From ANON - kit-kit on September 11, 2006
    aaaww i love the end it was a perfect mix of angst and fluffiness.
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  • From ANON - NyteKit on September 11, 2006
    Hee hee, very nice chapter here! You totally rock the Kurama/Yusuke fandom! This was a really great chapter. I like how you had their mating kind of a plan all put together by Enma, and the way you turned it into a big problem between them - the questioning of emotions and all. Also, the way you brought in the gods this chapter was great and really unexpected. Ending = awesome!!!

    Only thing that bothered me was the lack of page breaks in this chapter compared to the others. It made the scene changes a tad abrupt.
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  • From ANON - Bobii on August 22, 2006
    please, please, please, for the love of god, update. I think I might actually die if you don't. I
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  • From ANON - Nahau on July 14, 2006
    OMG what happened to the babies? Your fic is absolutely amazing! You're a brillant writer and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Please update soon, I have to know what happens next.
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  • From ANON - Lemoychocolate on June 02, 2006
    You got it! in the prologue, admittedly while Kurama was 'bottom' however, as the scene concluded, he went yokai. Yusuke didn't get pregnant by bottoming to Kurama, he became pregnant because Kurama's semen was smeared on the 'scar' on his stomach.

    I read in a magazine once (a woman was bemoaning the fact that she was pregnant (but hadn't had full penetration by her boyfriend). They indulged in a bit of dry humping but with her wearing only a pair of panties. Sperm can (and did) travel through her underwear, up her vagina and that was how she wound up pregnant.

    Of course this was YEARS ago that I read this so my medical facts may be skewered.

    Anyway, thank you for reading and enjoying! The lemon scenes, at least for me, are extremely difficult to create. I ususally know where the scene will dissolve into moans and groans, so I just put 'INSERT SEX SCENE HERE' in that space and continue writing. It may take about a couple of weeks to write an 10 chapter story, and an extra week to do the lemon scene.

    I've only started writing Kurama/Yusuke fics because the dearth of this pairing is scary. I see about a 100 Hiei/Kurama stories to about 1 story of Kurama/Yusuke.
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  • From BlueUtopiah on June 02, 2006
    Gods, I love this story. First of all, you write wonderfully long chapters and they're dense chapters - a lot happens and you take the time to delve into their psychological aspects, giving your writing terrific depth.

    Then there's the lemon. You write lemons that are different than anything I've seen out there - and that's a good thing...a very good thing. Your lemons have so much heat and are incredibly erotic and you do it in such a subtle way without letting them take over or counteract the plot. Nice.

    The Kuwabara/Hiei pairing slapped me right in the face and I laughed out loud!

    As far as improvements, the only thing I can think of is that you say in the latest chapter that Kurama was dominant in the prologue lemon, but when I read the prologue over, because of the despcription and the lack of proper names, it seems like Yusuke is the dominant one. I just figured that they switched dominance over the course of the night and that's how Yusuke ended up pregnant...am I wrong?

    I wish my reccommended reading list was back on my profile page, because I'd like to add this to my list!
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  • From ANON - Z on May 31, 2006
    Wow, this is such a good story. I can't wait to see the next update and find out who sent the plants to kidnap the babies. Well, whoever it is has better watch out b/c Yusuke and Karama will catch them.

    I have really enjoyed the entire angst/drama of the story. Please keep of the good work.
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  • From ANON - Kogas Hentai Luver (not logged in) on May 25, 2006
    OMG I'm so happy that they finally got together. That was a great chapter, nice and long the way I like them. I'm scared now for the kits. I can't imagine that Kurama's plants would harm the babies, so you've left a pretty damn good cliffy. Good for you! Can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - kit-kit on May 23, 2006
    wow im glad yusuke finally gave now i can't wait to see how the servants are going to act to yusuke mateship
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  • From on May 23, 2006
    You know, I don't think there's anything that could make this chapter any better than it already is, except for a more detailed lemon. But even that wish is because of aniticipation built up from the rest of the story. You surprised me a lot in this chapter, though. I didn't expect that Yukina/other female or Hiei/Kuwabara relationship going on. Of course I know of a lot of stories that bring H & K together, I didn't think this would be one of them. Luckily, it doesn't seem you'll be spending much time on either of those pairings, so I'll be okay with them. Yukina seriously surprised me, though! I was like 'WHAT!', and with Hiei and Kuwabara I was like 'Are You Serious?!'. It was great!

    Also, all the sexual tension you built up between Kurama and Yusuke to get to this point just made this all the better. It was almost beautiful, the way you described it. The ending was super-cute, too, with what you did with their ki and the children. It would be Kurama using his plants to care for his children when he's getting pleasure! ^^ Still, I sort of wish their climax would have been written, but the way you ended it was still lovely. Update soon!!
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  • From ANON - nette on May 23, 2006
    wow. that's all i can say after readin this chapter. i liked the fact you had everyone come to see the new couple and their children and the little twist with kuwabara and hiei pairing up, nice. its about time yusuke got over his fear of being intimate with kurama. can't wait for the next chapter. keep it up
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  • From ANON - Devious Lil Devil on May 23, 2006
    yes! yes! yes! yusuke finally gives in! and kurama wastes no time in getting what he wants. but what the hell is with the glowing and what happened to the kits? anyway, excellent work. this story is soooooo going on my favorites list.
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