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Reviews for Amayami

By : hColleen
  • From ANON - Ilene on August 10, 2007
    U R MY GODDESS! I WORSHIP U! *HANDS U BIGGEST COOKIE IN THE WORLD WITH GIGANTUOUS CHUNKS OF CHOCOLATE*
    I've read almost all ur stories, but decided to wait till now to rant about how awesome u r-I think i'll name my next fish after u!
    love u!
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  • From ANON - Nikatsin on August 13, 2006
    There are simply no words to describe that. Maybe "amazing", but it doesn't do this work justice. Part of the amazement comes from the fact that I find threesomes very hard to like, and that your fic just made me like this one more than my original Yu Yu Hakusho OTP. True, some combination of the three make up my top three favorites for the fandom, Hiei x Yusuke being at the top, then Yusuke x Kurama, and then Hiei x Kurama. I still didn't find the idea of all of them together all that attractive until I stumbled upon this little jewel. I've seen a few attempts at it, but it just didn't work. There was always some kind of favoritism for a certain pair that led the author to make the characters play favorites as well, whether for the purpose of a plot or the writer's own preferences, and I never took to that. For you see, I am a supporter of equality above all else, and not even my OTP or my own preferences can stand in the way of that. It's the reason why I usually avoid heterosexual pairings in most shounen-themed manga and anime, since the female is usually subservient, weak, barely introduced into the story, and without much purpose other than to increase the male's strength through his need to protect her. I also dislike many shoujo-themed things because of the same thing, only it being slightly to the reverse. You can see how strong my opinion is on the subject, I suppose. But the truth of it is that you didn't play favorites that I can tell, other than a small part in the beginning of the lemon in which it was small and only served to make the support between all three of them more pronounced.

    Although, I admit, Hiei seemed a tad out of character, but not against his general design. What I mean by that is, he appears more than capable of being "unsteady", in this case being afraid due to self-loathing. Something one would normally think he'd be more prone to, but also something he's had plenty of practice at hiding. So, I suppose my whole argument on your characterization of him is fairly useless, as I can see it happening any way. As a side note, I found the part where he refused to give up his katana and backed into the corner to be particularly amusing, and especially his emotions as he did so. Giving Hiei the role of the cornered animal is a nice change to that of it, naturally, being assigned to Kurama. Which is yet another thing I don't understand, as foxes are quite adept at hunting as well, but that's besides the point. -Besides Hiei, which is still debatable, I could tell no flaws in the characterizations of the other two. (Besides the obvious need for a small tweak to make all of them yaoi-acceptable. Although from my understanding, it wouldn’t really take much of a tweak to get them just so. Besides Yusuke’s overbearing straight-ness, and even that isn’t affirmed. And we know Yoshihiro-sensei has no qualms with shounen-ai, or at least not the concept, as the Sensui arc clearly pointed out.) But then, only Yoshihiro Togashi could say for sure, and I’m not him. I can only base judgements off of an informed opinion, and in many cases that’s not entirely fair. So I’ll just leave it at that.

    I can't even begin on your skill with imagery. The storm set as a background was no more, and no less than perfect. The way you described the lighting, even down to the way the characters breathed painted a clear picture in my mind. There wasn't too much description, and certainly not too little. As you said, the storm was almost alive on it's own, and could almost be considered the fourth character. It was simply elegant, and wonderfully beautiful. I honestly envy you.

    -I won't start on critisizing the lemon in fear of a nosebleed.

    The only thing I could even think to poke at would be some of the spelling mistakes. There aren't really that many, and the ones that are there don't really show up unless you stop to re-read it. Those are simple enough to fix, and in the end they couldn't even manage to minus half a point from the over-all rating I give it: A five. I'd rate it higher if I could. A fan-fiction like this is truly a rare pearl, and even moreso amongst PWPs. I'd say almost unheard of anymore. It's been a long while since I've had such a good read. It flows well, and what few mistakes I saw weren't so obvious as to hurt my eyes. That's saying alot, since the last fanfiction I read that was even close to it was when I was completely rooted in the Naruto fandom, which was about a year ago now.

    Highest praises that I've given in a long time. I just love it too much for proper words. *bows and gives cookies*

    ~Nika
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  • From ANON - Lonely Lust on June 27, 2006
    I LOVED IT!!!! As many of your stories that I havn't loved, but anyways, it was great!!!
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  • From ANON - pureevil230 on May 18, 2006
    yummy.
    love smut/fluff.
    i love that pairing of hiei/yusuke/kurama or any variation.
    lol actually i love any yaoi pairing as long as yusuke is involved and usually as uke he makes such a yummy one. 'smirk'

    write more yummy smut! please!
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  • From BlueUtopiah on May 09, 2006
    Jeez, I'm like a day late and a dollar short on reviewing, and I read this about 24 hours ago. Yes - you'll need to start consulting with me about when to post! :D

    You were so right - the storm was practically as much of a character as the guys. I liked how you went back and forth between the description of the storm/how it affects the environment in the room and what our demons were talking about (or doing). It flowed very well.

    I loved Kurama seeing the bond between Yusuke and Hiei and getting upset, then the two recognizing that and comforting him. I'm glad to see that Kurama can be jealous about those two. As usual, the lemon was hawt - and Hiei was in the middle! Yea for the middle! Damn, but you can write a crazy threesome. You should do a seminar on the YYH OT3.
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  • From ANON - KyoHana on May 08, 2006
    You don't know how much I absolutely LOVE the way you write Hiei/Kurama/Yusuke... and to think, until I began reading your work, I didn't even LIKE threesomes. Now these three, are my one and ONLY threesome.

    Okay -- on with the review of the actual story. What can I say, it was nothing short of stupendous! Hiei was his typical stoic, 'I'm the forbidden one so therefore, no one is supposed to love me', self. Yet, there was a sense of sadness, an almost 'humaness' if you will, to his confusion over what he truly feels for Kurama and Yusuke (and what they, in turn, feel for him) and his very stoicism. As well, it's always wonderful to see the #1 punk, Yusuke Urameshi, show his own vulnerable and passionate, caring side.

    I think the rain was not only a perfect accompaniment to the unfolding scenes of this story, but a metaphor (at least, it seemed so to me) for Hiei's confused feelings for the other two.

    As always, this was a wonderful piece of fiction and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it... again and again!
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  • From ANON - Ryukotsusei on May 06, 2006
    Amazing, absolutely amazing. I must say I love how your muse grabbed ahold of this one and ran with it. Hiei's reaction to their confession was sooo.. soo.. Hiei.. It was perfect, exactly as I would have expected of him. And Yusuke's method of learning what to do? *Melts into a puddle of goo on the floor* Tis going to take a while to get my brain fully functioning again, wonderful job! *sends a plateful of Hiei cookies* Keep up the good work!
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  • From ANON - shiorifoxiesmom on May 06, 2006
    OMG that was awesome. That increadible lemon was a great way to welcome back AFF.
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  • From on May 06, 2006
    Now we see the finished product. And it was very good! I love how you brought out an insecurity in each of them. I really didn't expect Kurama to be submissive in this one. I figured Hiei out of all of them. But the way you brought forth his own fear turned out great! I love how it turned out!
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  • From ANON - kit-kit on May 06, 2006
    i love this story
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