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Reviews for Wedding Night

By : ichigokun
  • From RogueMudblood on October 26, 2011

    I liked the beginning. The way you started out was marvelous, having Kuwabara attempting to be a gentleman towards his virgin bride. But at the moment you have him reveal his penis, the story seems to become farcical in nature. Whether this was your intent, I am unsure; your summary indicated some humor, but you also have the WAFF tag, so I had thought there would be a genuinely romantic encounter.

    While I admit extreme amusement at "little crotch men," and the slight against her brother's manhood (though subtle) was very entertaining, I am curious as to just how thin you thought her hymen to be?

    You have him inserting multiple fingers into her and you've made it very clear that she is a virgin. He has not played with her at all prior digital penetration. Simply shoving fingers into a dry, unaroused virgin, no matter that she is his wife, would completely scar her in regards to the act of sex; the pain involved with dry penetration of any kind of the vagina or anus is not to be taken lightly. If she's already in pain, from him stimulating her clitoris, then she certainly is not going to welcome the intrusion of his fingers, much less his penis.

    I hardly think, given that she has not evidenced any measure of enjoyment, that she would be inclined to climax; many women, due to the pain involved in being 'de-flowered', do not achieve orgasm during the first act of vaginal penetration.

    If you were attempting farce, you have done a masterful job of it; you've depicted here a rather accurate version of the tale women used to weave for their virgin daughters of the plight of a wife, a woman who is expected to lay while her husband ruts above her and takes his pleasure.
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