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Reviews for Intimacy

By : mhmartini
  • From ANON - AnnaJaganshi on August 11, 2006
    That was really sweet. Hiei should know better than to bottle things up, especially from Kurama. Grrrrrrrrrreat job with this one too!
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  • From ANON - Foxgirl_500 on June 27, 2005
    If your aim was for loveing and sweet rather than hot, you hit your mark head on! Awsome story, can't really find anything rong with it.
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  • From ANON - mikai on June 07, 2005
    *sobs* i thought that was relle sweet. *crys for hiei* i feel so bad for him(but i LOVED the story so much!). i enjoyed it a lot! great job!
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  • From ANON - december wind on May 20, 2005
    This is actually the first of your works I read and my favorite.
    I always intended to leave a review but every time I read this I'm dazed, and I end up forgetting to.
    This is very well-written and the images, sensation and the style it is written in is awesome.
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  • From ANON - BWinner(Not signed in) on March 08, 2005
    Hn, I like this fic. The kind intamacy that Hiei and Kurama share is quite refreshing. It's not too sappy, and not to sparce either. The grammar you have is also very nice, kudos to the good fix up job. All in all I was quite pleased with this, it was something strictly based on love with out the need to intertwine lust with it, that is a rare find. I hope you grace the fandom with more wonderful work.
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  • From ANON - hColleen on January 25, 2005
    Wow! This story is awsome. I really enjoy your writing style. I think the formatting issues are the site...I've noticed a lot of strangeness while reading fictions here...like incomplete words...partial words repeated, etc...anyways...The story was very beautiful. It seemed to be more....intimate...almost than the most descritive/erotic lemon scene I've read...it's a wonderful story.
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  • From ANON - BrokenDesire on November 26, 2004
    that was sooooooo great. very well
    written! i've never read a fic like that
    one before, but i must say...BRAVO!
    i was expecting hot steamy sex! lol
    but what you wrote was better if i do
    say so myself :) i absolutely loved it.
    10/10
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  • From ANON - Altar of Wishes on November 20, 2004
    That was great!
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  • From ANON - morgankit on November 18, 2004
    That was really sweet! I adored it so much. I like how you were slightly able to keep Hiei in character while going through the entire thing. And it did portray a sweet, sensually concerned side of the relationship.

    The few things that most of the other reviews have said: it's confusing for readers when the paragraphs are blocked together as well as the dialogue. Spaceing twice between the ends of sentences are also a good idea to keep everything neat and separete for the readers and in editing.

    It really is a sweet story. I hope to see more like it from you! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Fuzzy Eared^^ on November 07, 2004
    Don't worry, you definitely did that concept justice. I would, however, suggest that, if you were to try this again, to give a little more background to it and a different setting than the usual Kurama's bedroom location.
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  • From ANON - techempath1 (not signed in) on October 11, 2004
    I remember trying to review this earlier. It was a wonderful story, and while it wasn't whathoughought at first, it was better than I imagined! You did an amazing job. I thoroughly enjoyed this from beginning to end.
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  • From ANON - StormAz on September 26, 2004
    Well, I don't know how you feel about what you wrote, but I think it was just beautiful.

    From start to finish, it was all about love and caring on a level well above pure physical. Heck of a story you have there!
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  • From ANON - Stella on September 26, 2004
    Way to go. I loved it. It was very intimate, without being dirty or smutty. Although, dirty and smutty is is ok sometimes too.
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  • From ANON - Starr on September 26, 2004
    I thought it was wonderfully written. Sometimes I prefer the beautiful aspect of Hiei and Kurama's relationship than the outright sexing. Might I only give one bit of concrit? Whenever someone new speaks, the paragraph has to be broken.

    As he rubbed Hiei’s small fingers in his own, he prompted gently, “Tell me about it, Hiei.” Immediatelhe ehe entranced youkai began to speak.

    “It’s Yukina. This is the first year she knows.” Puzzled, the kitsune urged his lover to continue, working up the arm to the shoulder. “Tomorrow. She will be thinking tomorrow. What if she doesn’t like it?” Kurama continued with the second arm, starting again at the hand, and slowly edging his way up to the shoulder. He could see by the expression on Hiei’s face, that the closer he came to the strong chest, the more forceful the emotions became, and it would become more intense as he went. Before he could push the fire demon to continue, Hiei did so on his own. “They discarded me. They threw me away. What if she throws me away, as well? I don’t want that. I never told her. I was afraid of being thrown away again. Tomorrow, she may change her mind.” Starting on Hiei’s foot, Kurama continued his progression up towards Hiei’s torso again.

    “What is so special about tomorrow, Love?” he asked gently.

    Sorta like that. As long as Hiei's speaking, or the subject of the matter doesn't change, there doesn't need to be a break. If someone else begins to speak, it needs separation.
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  • From ANON - neko-chan on September 26, 2004
    This fic is so beautiful and intense; I haven't read something so original in a very long time!
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