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Reviews for Just a demonic love story

By : Suryallee7104
  • From ANON - Lady Death Write on April 09, 2009
    This story made no sense. You mastery of the English language is poor, you use the wrong tenses, have spelling mistakes on every line. Grammar and structure are horrible. I am sorry to tell you this but you do not have a future as a writer.
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  • From madmiko on June 16, 2008
    I'm sure I must have reasd this once before, a while ago, but I didn't know you then like I do now as the brilliant artist you are. So, this was a real treat for me to come across this now. ^_^ I really enjoyed it. (Of course, I am a huge Hiei/Kagome fan.) I liked the way you had Hiei watching to see what Kagome would choose to do with the jewel. And he let her know that he would have killed her if she had made a poor decision. Fortunately, he didn't have to do that. ^_^ It's really good just as it is, but I would love to see you add another chapter to round out the "love story." Hiei's continued visits and interactiong with her and Shippou would be nice to see. (As well as some fluff and smex, of course! ^_~) Thanks for sharing this with us!
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  • From DamiaEternal on June 03, 2008
    Well aside from spelling errors such as allot and staid, plus a few missing words in sentences. It was a very good story. Though my question is...Is it finished? There is a lot you could do, okay really, I just wanna see Koenma's reaction.
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  • From kagekoorime19 on February 13, 2008
    um this is getting updated right?
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  • From ANON - Elizabeth on August 15, 2007
    I find that "Just a Demonic Love Story" has a lot of potential. It is refreshing to find an author who puts such thought into the plot and keeps to the character's personalities. Hiei's thoughts of Kagome are, in my opinion, in character with the show and manga. Your grammar and sentence structure may not be perfect but the sentences are complex and certainly reflect a strong vocabulary and solid writing skills.
    Don't let flamers discourage you. I enjoy your story very much and will be on the lookout for more of your work.
    Sincerely,
    Elizabeth
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  • From ANON - Aurora on October 28, 2006
    Nice story, though you might want to get a beta. I love the plot and the way you portray Hiei, however, the spelling mistakes and grammar errors get in the way and make the story seem unreadable. I suggest you use a word processor with spellcheck.
    Another thing I noticed was the inu-gumi's characterization. I find it hard to believe Miroku and Sango completely ignored Kagome. Maybe, if you decide to rewrite this, or in the later chapters, you could give them more depth.
    Anyways, overall it was a good, original idea. Despite the mistakes you obviously have talent, now you just need to develope it. I hope you update this.
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  • From ANON - Dyquem on September 13, 2006
    I enjoyed this. I always like it when Shippo gets to come into the modern era, and I think kag/hiei is a good pairing.
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  • From ANON - Bree McGregor on August 10, 2006
    P.S. I hope your doing well after your car acadent.
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  • From ANON - Bree McGregor on August 10, 2006
    I really liked your story. I read all three chapters. getting a beta would be a good idea though. I have one for my stories and it helps a lot. anyway I love the way you have writen Hiei and his dark amusment... is the story finished? if so please tell me. I would love to see if and where you take this.
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  • From ANON - ~BUM~ on May 07, 2006
    Oooohh nice, Koemma won't be happy. I like what your doing. WRITE MORE!!
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