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Reviews for Love's Denial

By : Drumanel
  • From ANON - anit on October 30, 2007
    Wow, I can't believe this still has so few reviews. I guess it's hard to get oc stories to take off but your's is interesting and it's substantially more so now with the tournament on the way (Tournament Junkie). Same as a few other authors, Kurama's attitude bothers me. Oh don't get me wrong, definitely see him as being excessively domineering a lot of the time and going for very submissive women but it's the lack of manners and other aspects that he genuinely has in the anime and manga that bothers me. He may be quite dark and rouh and so on but it'd be good if you could show how credible your story is by making it clear that he isn't bitter about his friends and family. Aside from that (which you are free to overlook btw, it's just an in character thing) my only criticism would be your repetition of certain phrases. You need to expand your range of descriptions, especially for the sex scenes. For eg. you frequently describe Kurama as 'raping' Aki's mouth and describe her as looking like a 'wanton whore', they might be the most accurate way of saying it but you need to show a little more creativity; something which you clearly have but are still learning to utilize to it's full capacity.
    Lol! It seems strange to be saying something so serious and methodical about technique and using those kinds of examples! Keep it coming, I really look forward to the next chapter!
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  • From IllusionsInBlood on September 22, 2007
    Sorry it took me so long to read this, I've been extremely busy. This is very good. Aki makes me want to laugh and roll my eyes. I look forward to the next chapter, this chapter drew me in much more.
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  • From IllusionsInBlood on August 05, 2007
    I like this chapter, you're developing the plot very well. What happened to Aki? *curious*
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  • From IllusionsInBlood on July 24, 2007
    O.o Now I really need to know what's going to happen! I think you should write a book, I'm sure it would be amazing. My email's hopeless.daydreamer@gmail.com
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  • From IllusionsInBlood on June 12, 2007
    I really enjoyed this chapter, I like how you're slowly building the plot up and I'm excited about what's going to happen. I'm glad you gave Koenma a break, he deserves it. :) The idea of a demon M/S club is an interesting idea, but you might want to add why there's so many demons in ningenkai when they're not supposed to be. Are they hiding? Or are you making it a bit a au?

    Oh, and it's okay if you don't post all that often, no internet access is definitely a good excuse. Actually, if you want to, you can email me when you update so I can come read it a little bit after you put it up.

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  • From IllusionsInBlood on May 10, 2007
    Sorry I didn't review sooner. I just realized today that you had updated. ^^;;
    I like this new twist to the story, now the Reikai Tantei are all involved. And Koenma really needs a good massage and sleep in your story. :D I'm looking forward to seeing how this pans out.
    That makes me feel special, yay!
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  • From IllusionsInBlood on May 04, 2007
    Blood-sucking kitten? I kinda like that. ^_^ Shiori's trying to set Aki and Kurama up? That's great. I love the idea. I'm glad you understand the difference between Master and Sadist...a lot of people don't and it irritates me. I'm looking forward to seeing how Kurama and Aki react to this.
    I love how you put Koenma in, but didn't make him shallow like so many authors. He's my favorite character(Kurama's my second favorite) and there's so few good ones with him.
    You've made my day. If my vote counts, I say you should definitely continue this.
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  • From IllusionsInBlood on May 03, 2007
    Yay! I'm looking forward to it.
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  • From Drumanel on May 03, 2007
    STOP CALLING ME KITTEN DAMMIT! I am not a kitten. Good story and all. You are developing your characters good. A even showing a good plot line. Guess what though, you don't have to be logged in to review. Now that i have reviewed your story, back to yelling at you. ME NO KITTEN! IF you call me a kitten again, then i will stalk you around school or find where you are moving to and throw nice sharp, shinny and pointy objects at you.
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  • From RyokoChan on May 02, 2007
    Nice story and all, I'm just really hating Kurama's attitude.
    I just can't see him as the sadistic type.
    Continue if you want, but sorry, I doubt I'll read more.
    Keep going for the sake of the others who like this story, though. ;)
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  • From IllusionsInBlood on April 29, 2007
    I really like this. I've always thought that Kurama would want a BDSM type relationship. Hurry up and continue!!
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  • From Drumanel on March 28, 2007
    Hey! No wonder you don't have any reviews, you have to be logged in. I had to create an account just to send you this. It's getting really interesting though, and you are fast at up dating. Seriously though go to your control panel and unclick the no anomous reviewers. i think i spelled that wrong. Owell
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