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Reviews for The Forbidden Fairy Tale

By : ForlornVampMistress
  • From ANON - Anon on October 31, 2007
    If you don't mind a bit of criticism, please loose the author's notes you have inserted throughout the story. Author's notes should be either at the beginning or the end of the story if you must have them at all...NOT IN YOUR STORY. They really do interrupt the pace and flow of the story, not to mention they are very irritating for the reader to come across while reading a good lemon scene. Another thing is to pay attention to some little details that go with the anime/manga--remember, Yu Yu Hakusho is set in Japan, therefore all the characters would be speaking Japanese, yet you mention that Jasmine's servant cannot speak English very well.

    Otherwise, this was a very good story. Your OC was interesting, and your lemon scenes were very well written over all--just watch those Author's notes. Look forward to seeing more!
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