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for The Vacation (yeah right)

by Evey

person Anon
schedule September 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think this sucks. It is not a fic.. its dialogue... I suck at writing yet I write better then this
person bob
schedule July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooh your friend died i'm so sorry to hear that but the good news is I love your fic and I can't figure out why I didn't read it sooner! Please continue, update soon. I want to know what happens to Hiei!!
person Natalya
schedule July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Grins* I am very happy...but will those two (Kuwa and Toguro) meet up again?
person Natalya
schedule July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh...this is getting good! I love it!
person Natalya
schedule July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Elder is a demon...basically immortal because of his ability to move his organs around and shape-shift. Yay, you updated! I'm so happy that you did! Please don't give up on this!
person Natalya
schedule July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I would be willing to help you...if you want. I don't really want to see you give your stories up.
person Anon
schedule July 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
update!
person Natalya
schedule July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Noooo...you can't leave it there! You are so mean to me! *Sighs* I am definitely getting a complex! I promise no more annoyed reviews just don't leave it like this again!
person comicfancat
schedule July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this could be a good story if you'd stop with the banter and silly remarks between what goes on.It shows you have no idea how to set a mood unless you just want to set a bad one(hope not)
person Natalya
schedule July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I guess it's okay if it's nonconsentual but I still think Ani having Kuwabara enjoy it would be more tormentive. I mean how ill do you think Kuwabara would be if he was to whimper and beg the elder toguro to touch him? You are doing well so far though I would consider getting a beta...someone to read and critique your works for spelling, grammar, ect.

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