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Good story though I hope Kurama stops being mean soon. This has a lot of potential. Update soon.

This chapter was even better than the last. I did enjoy the slight character change in Youko - it gives him more depth and makes him more likeable. I also like Hiei's adjustment in attitude as well (I would love to see him eating out of Youko's hand!). I can't wait to see more!

hey! I know who you are. You're the cool lady that is writing that one other story I really like...But anyway, I love this story. You've gotta continue this one. "Always tip Your Waiter"!!! That was what the other story was called. I love that one too. But I feel like that one is a relapse of what happened before FF.net deleted your account. Why did they do that? That was retarded. But, anyway, please continue writing. I really like your writing style. It's very pleasing to the eye. ~Ys

Hi B here. I think I'll come out of hiding to review this interesting piece of work. I must say I'm a real sucker for Hiei angst. I love to torture him, he's just the sad lonely type you want to abuse and then kiss and make feel better. Plus I've never really pictured Kurama as the soft and delicate type. I can't stand fics that make him weak and helpless it's so OC. I've always seen him as the control type, inventive and playful, but always in charge even when on bottom. I can very easily see him in the role you've depicted, he wasn't a nice tame fox, he was cold and cruel; any true fan of the series picks that up by watching it. His human nature is just showing him how cold and cruel. I suppose you could say he feel remorse and close to, but not quite, regret for his past crimes. Prehaps that's way he's always taking so many injuries in his battles, a form of punishment or an attempt to work things out more peacefully; or there's always the probablity he's just that much weaker from his previous life. Still I like strong dominating Youko Kurama's and your Kurama definately fits. Right now in your story he has a Kurasue feel to him, detacted, but possessive. I'd like to see a little more inside thought if you continue this fic, right now we don't have much to go off of. From what I've gattered so far, Kurama doesn't even consider Hiei all that attractive (yes he's cute, I'll never deny it), nor strong, nor really interesting. He was more like a bonus prize for his troubles. What exactly did Kurama find so appealing that he'd go through the trouble of catching, calloring, and keeping a mixed breed he thinks is half fire demon (Hiei didn't even use any of his abilities in the fic so how does Kurama even know that much?). There must have been something that caught his interest. If you read or look at Arine Toshimi's doujinshis you'd probably get a real good bases for your type of Kurama (just a suggestion on my part, her (?) work is so beautiful and emotional for both characters. With a very confused Kurama desiring and hurting the one he wants, not sure why he does what he does). If you don't know her stuff or would like to look more into it here's a great web site that hosts it http://www.makai-nights.net/djs.htm (it might be down right now, if you're really interested e-mail me I'll hook you up).
I also thought this story went kind of fast, it could have easily been broken up into several chapters with some thoughts and descriptive details thrown in to fill it out. However, it is, as it currently stands, a one shot so I'm not going to nit pick it. I very much enjoy the general plot and would like to see some more. Please consider more chapters.
Hope this review is helpful and encouraging.
ja ne
b-chan

youko did change, but i guess before he was angry, cause hiei didn´t obey him, and who can resist hiei, anyway. now, i wonder what would youko do if hiei tried to escape, i bet he wouldn't be nice at all. and i'm wondering too if Miho is going to do something, as a revenge or something like that, cause i guess she must hate not being youko's favourite.
i must say that, even if i don't like rape, i guess your story seems like something that could have happened if those 2 had met in makai, afterall, youkais aren't nice.but i still hope they'll fall for each other, i just love those 2 together. ^^
well, i'll be waiting for your next chapter! ^^

Yeah, there was a major jump in personality though I do like the second chapter better!!

You totally need to continue this! I loved it! I do remember your other story on ff.net (Always Tip Your Waiter) and had left a review on that site, but I'm going to check it out again.

But - yeah - defintely keep writing this one. Hiei needs some discipline from the Youko.

Yay! Much better (not that it wasn't great before)! I like where this is going a lot more. YAY!

Sexy, more please(^_^)

Hmm... it's interesting. I'd like to see where you go with this fic. ^^