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June 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
it has alot of errors(grammar and spelling). if you want i can be your beta? it's very good for your first story i liked it
schedule
June 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very cute story. You need to work on your grammer and punctuation but writing more cute stories like this one will help that.
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June 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I would strongly suggest you invest in a beta if you seriously wish to improve your story. AFF has a group totally dedicated to helping authors improve their stories.... http://groups.yahoo.com/group/AdultFanFictionBetaReaders